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Sunday 22 December 2013

Daze of Christmas (Day 8): December tanka

blustery dusk sends
whistling, swooping, gusting birds
on freshening wings;
            eddies swirl and nestle down
bleak sleeping ground is waking.    




for: imaginary garden with real toads
shared at: poets united
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10 comments:

  1. revelations22 December 2013 at 13:46

    you painted a picture with your words.. great tanka...

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  2. Grace22 December 2013 at 14:07

    I love the movements here - whistling, swooping, gusting birds ~ Great imagery here ~ Wishing you Merry Christmas and blessed holiday ~

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  3. Maude Lynn22 December 2013 at 14:55

    Gorgeous imagery.

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  4. Brian Miller22 December 2013 at 15:42

    nice movement and imagery in this...
    awake...awake...

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  5. madhumakhi22 December 2013 at 18:44

    A beautifully vivid tanka. 'Bleak sleeping ground is waking' It sounds as if the birds have imparted some of their own life to the 'sleeping ground'.

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  6. Susie Clevenger22 December 2013 at 20:10

    Beautiful imagery...so visual

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  7. Sumana Roy22 December 2013 at 20:29

    so lovely and lively tanka...

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  8. Mary22 December 2013 at 20:47

    Beautifully expressed tanka!

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  9. paperdollmom22 December 2013 at 23:36

    Lovely scene that you've captured.

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  10. Kerry O'Connor23 December 2013 at 02:03

    Your tanka is full of movement! I love the addition of sound qualities in the assonance, and -ing words. The whole creates an amazing image of the dusk of a mid-winter's day. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing on Real Toads.

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