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Tuesday 19 February 2013

on writing...

...we scribble on: a therapy both thoughtful and wasteful:
put messages in our bottles to remind us of us later;
freely forwarding our voices onwards to a sad new world
simply sending out our lonely liners on a sea of words...

...they are bobbing out on waves from the beaches where we stand
they go rippling out in rhythms that detach from our hands
at the mercy of the oceans, letters plentiful as sand
drifting, swept away in storms, washed ashore in distant lands.

although
some may find the ocean's bed,

some
will become
a treasure chest,
cracked
open
to be sifted
by a child on a quest.






Posted on dverse open link night 84








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17 comments:

  1. Brian Miller19 February 2013 at 13:56

    some will become a treasure...that is def encouraging...like the message in a bottle metaphor for our writing...we toss it out there not knowing where it will go...and hope someone will cherish it...nice write man...

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    1. ND Mitchell19 February 2013 at 14:29

      Your question earlier on dverse inspired this Brian. It was bubbling up on the drive home and I had to write some of it whilst queuing in traffic. Thanks for the inspiration :)

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  2. Jennifer Wagner19 February 2013 at 14:16

    That first line is perfect...I so identify with all of this. I think you nailed what it is what we do as writers. I really like your close too...'a child on a quest'...wonderful.

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    1. ND Mitchell19 February 2013 at 14:29

      Thanks Jennifer. Your writing is received gratefully on these shores :)

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  3. Scarlet19 February 2013 at 16:03

    What a lovely way to express and describe the muse ~ I like those messages in the bottle.. who know who will read it someday ~

    Nice to see you David ~

    Grace

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  4. Mary19 February 2013 at 16:23

    I enjoyed this poem so much, David! Indeed poetry can be both helpful and wasteful indeed; but sometimes we don't know which it is until much later! And indeed some of our poetry may end up on the 'ocean bed,' but others will be treasured for a long time to come.

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  5. Unknown19 February 2013 at 17:02

    Wow! A sea of words. What an image. Very nicely done.

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  6. Unknown19 February 2013 at 17:48

    I like the long lines in the first two stanzas. A creative poem indeed.

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  7. Claudia19 February 2013 at 21:35

    putting messages in our bottles to remind us of us later...def. can relate to this..

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  8. Amrit Sinha19 February 2013 at 22:35

    Perfect !!!

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  9. anthonynorth20 February 2013 at 00:51

    The writers' mind perfectly disclosed.

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  10. The Unknowngnome20 February 2013 at 01:20

    Definitely a treasure!

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  11. Stan Ski20 February 2013 at 05:58

    Had to do that message in a bottle thing when I came out of hospital... head injury... amnesia... long story...

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  12. Sarav20 February 2013 at 06:28

    David, love how you shifted form on this, made me smile. And of course the ocean analogy one of my favorites, also enjoyed that message in a bottle :-) and what you said in the comments, words falling from the sky is very fun...

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  13. lucychili20 February 2013 at 16:20

    writing into the ocean feels real

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  14. Sreeja20 February 2013 at 20:55

    Enjoyed this fully....

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  15. Frank Watson22 February 2013 at 09:02

    I really liked the stanza at the end... think it makes a good standalone poem:

    some

    will become
    a treasure chest,
    cracked
    open
    to be sifted
    by a child on a quest.

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