Sunday, 22 December 2013

Daze of Christmas (Day 8): December tanka

blustery dusk sends
whistling, swooping, gusting birds
on freshening wings;
            eddies swirl and nestle down
bleak sleeping ground is waking.    




for: imaginary garden with real toads
shared at: poets united

11 comments:

  1. you painted a picture with your words.. great tanka...

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  2. I love the movements here - whistling, swooping, gusting birds ~ Great imagery here ~ Wishing you Merry Christmas and blessed holiday ~

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  3. nice movement and imagery in this...
    awake...awake...

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  4. An awakening of spring and rebirth. Lovely imagery, David. Merry Christmas! :)

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  5. A beautifully vivid tanka. 'Bleak sleeping ground is waking' It sounds as if the birds have imparted some of their own life to the 'sleeping ground'.

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  6. Beautifully expressed tanka!

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  7. Lovely scene that you've captured.

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  8. Your tanka is full of movement! I love the addition of sound qualities in the assonance, and -ing words. The whole creates an amazing image of the dusk of a mid-winter's day. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing on Real Toads.

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