this is soo painful indeed twist of wisdom :)
you say so much here, and leave me feeling her loss. gripping and powerful. thank you so much for linking. e.
intense moment there man...the mistaking of you for him...that might break my heart...
tangled by her grief -- a strong image
WOW! Rarely read an haiku that follows the form's intention and tells a complete tale in a unique and riveting way. Masterful, this.
Thanks for all these positive remarks guys. I've not tried haiku too much and it's a big encouragement to hear your responses.
yeah, the first line itself grabs our attention, looking forward to read more of your haiku!
So nice that you tried haiku! Strong emotion you show here. What you wrote is in perfect 5-7-5 form. This is called a Senryu, when you write about emotions. It's a Haiku when inspired by nature, and there is a reference to nature in it. I like both forms. Great job! :)
Thanks Loredana and thanks for clarifying what kind of poem this is!
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I guess it takes a fellow teacher to spot the truth in this! You're right. It's a lack of wisdom on her part, but I felt the twist of wisdom, in that, recognising the reason behind her behaviour, didn't bring me any comfort.
I am glad you are trying this form ~ This is a good attempt, specially the first line ~ Great to see you at HH ~
Wow, that's quite an image.Richard
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