Tuesday, 19 June 2012

Twist of Wisdom

tangled by her grief
father-left girl screams me down
mistakes me for him




Prompted by:
http://haiku-heights.blogspot.co.uk/2012/06/149-wisdom.html
and Imperfect Prose
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15 comments:

  1. ellen abbott20 June 2012 at 07:41

    whoa.

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  2. NAWAL20 June 2012 at 10:03

    this is soo painful indeed twist of wisdom :)

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  3. Unknown20 June 2012 at 17:34

    chills.

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  4. Mommy Emily20 June 2012 at 20:07

    you say so much here, and leave me feeling her loss. gripping and powerful. thank you so much for linking. e.

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  5. Brian Miller20 June 2012 at 20:34

    intense moment there man...the mistaking of you for him...that might break my heart...

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  6. Kathleen T. Jaeger20 June 2012 at 23:16

    tangled by her grief -- a strong image

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  7. Unknown21 June 2012 at 07:56

    WOW! Rarely read an haiku that follows the form's intention and tells a complete tale in a unique and riveting way. Masterful, this.

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  8. ND Mitchell21 June 2012 at 08:24

    Thanks for all these positive remarks guys. I've not tried haiku too much and it's a big encouragement to hear your responses.

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  9. Jaideep Rao22 June 2012 at 09:47

    yeah, the first line itself grabs our attention, looking forward to read more of your haiku!

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  10. Magical Mystical Teacher22 June 2012 at 11:23

    Twist of wisdom or lack of wisdom?

    Gathering Wisdom

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    1. ND Mitchell22 June 2012 at 15:17

      I guess it takes a fellow teacher to spot the truth in this! You're right. It's a lack of wisdom on her part, but I felt the twist of wisdom, in that, recognising the reason behind her behaviour, didn't bring me any comfort.

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  11. ND Mitchell22 June 2012 at 15:08

    Thanks Loredana and thanks for clarifying what kind of poem this is!

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  12. Grace22 June 2012 at 15:49

    I am glad you are trying this form ~ This is a good attempt, specially the first line ~

    Great to see you at HH ~

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  13. Mr. Walker29 June 2012 at 22:01

    Wow, that's quite an image.

    Richard

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