Saturday, 2 March 2013

kingdom

a tree for birds to shelter
stems from the smallest seed
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and bread to stuff the starving
swells steadily with yeast 
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there's gold for any digger
who cares to probe the field
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the bargain of the century:
the pearl that seals the deal.





The Gospels are full of stories and I found four of them told in quick succession. I tried to put in them in a short two line form of seven syllables (mostly), followed by six. The second line had to be shorter than the first to fit in with the idea of a kingdom growing from something small.

Posted on dverse: Poetics. An Evening of Short Verse

26 comments:

  1. Loved the pattern that blended perfectly with your words !!!

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  2. Right on Message! It may be a micro technically but it speaks volumes.

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  3. An impressive form; and a worthwhile message!

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  4. nice...love the creativity you used with the fonts...and what a riddle as well...nice exploration of the scripture...available for any who probe the field...smiles..

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  5. Fantastic! Love the message and your creative, fun and enjoyable form. :-)

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  6. I don't think I've ever seen this form before. Great work!!

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  7. I love the way this poem looks on the page, and love the opening lines, especially.

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  8. very cool take on that story..one of my favs in the bible as it says so much about priorities and passion

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  9. very nicely done. Quick hitting anecdotes from the Gospel, telling a story, offering short pieces to reflect upon. You used the short verse extremely well here. Thanks

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  10. pared down to the essential message - lovely K

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  11. I love these pearls and nuggets of wisdom ~ Thanks for sharing them ~

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  12. Love them all. Perfectly said. The first one is my favorite (if I have to choose)

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  13. Gold or pearls? Tough choice.

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  14. Like little proverbs..and a pearl to seal the deal makes any day

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  15. There is gold in your words, excellent

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  16. Learned from the master - and there's never been a better teacher or teller of stories. Jesus was certainly fond of less-is-more - many contemporary preachers, myself included, could do to learn more from his methods.

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  17. Very creative - excellent.
    Anna :o]

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  18. Beautiful, thought provoking and creative

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  19. Word :) Excellente presentation. Kool voice. Anointed words.

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  20. ...what a clever idea to do that... and the whole act reads like a parable to me... like the message conveyed on the first couplet mentioning birds on a tree... greart experimental vibe here... excellent... smiles...

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  21. I love the thought that you put into the formatting here. Very creative.

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  22. the Christians writings are packed with stories as are the HIndu, the Taoist, the Confucian and so much more. You've rhymed together 4 familiar parables nicely here -- with a new message of sorts. Superbly done -- though I must say, the small font was torture on my tiny eyeballs! But with effort, I found the pearls.
    :-)

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  23. Form has a lot to do with the success of a poem, but this stands alone on what you built ;_)

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  24. nice one! with a good msg..loved the pattern!

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  25. Beautiful David, truth packaged so.

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  26. David, these are so beautiful, each a delight in its own right. It's amazing how little stanzas can say so much :-)

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